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Mise en Abime

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:new: EDIT 19 June 2015: In the Arms of Death Lies Life for Life is Death and Fate, Life and Death are both deleted. Consider this as the first part of this series.

The third part in the series, with In the Arms of Death Lies Life for Life is Death (shehrozeameen.deviantart.com/a…) the first, and Fate, Life and Death (shehrozeameen.deviantart.com/a…) the second.

Interestingly, the title isn't Italian (as was the case in the previous two works), its in French. Being put into abyss is... basically the equivalent of going the opposite or acting in the opposite direction with the act... much like what Zee-Baal is going through.

Also, the word Zee-Baal is not made up. Its the closest Romanized accented form of the Urdu word, which is a noun (explicitly in the masculine sense) which means "an honorable man". Before that, I chose an Irish word for the character, but refrained because this made more sense.

Again, a slight departure from the original tradition. But its nominal.

Hope you like it
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:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

Since this was the third part in a series, I started by reading the first two parts. I have to say... Wow... You have written some epic poems here- both in length and in content!

What a journey this has been! Death, life, fate, The Drifter and now Zee-Baal have brought me with them through a truly adventurous saga. It captured my interest because everything gets twisted together at times- which I think is fitting because for me, you wouldn't have death without life, and so on.

Also, you have contradiction and yet based on the context, these contradictions work. Such as:

The end is never known
The end is cold, absolute, and bare boned


Another thing I enjoyed was the slight use of alliteration, such as this line:

The realism is a reflection reflecting

Things like this are rampant through out the piece and THAT kept it so very interesting.

I LOVED the interaction between Death, The Drifter and Zee Baal. There were some lines that were just... brilliant! This one was one of my favorites:

(Zee-Baal)
I have...Always...Been here
(Drifter)
That was what you first said
When you looked out to the sky
and saw the clarity
of blueness merged with a hue
of majestic silver
(Zee-Baal)
...I...
(Drifter)
You were sad
your being was beyond reconcile
you were a meshwork of melancholia
bordering towards torment and despair

WOW! Just...Wow!

Another one I loved is this:

You died... To give life a meaning
and death... A Cause


So simple, yet so true!

Seriously, I could keep going on about the things I loved about this. You have truly outdone yourself.

If I have any negatives at all, it would be that I didn't care for some of the fonts you used, as I found it not so easy to read, but that is really just me knit picking.

You should be so proud of this!