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Quatrain II

Journal Entry: Fri Jan 11, 2013, 1:01 PM
Writing in vain my sorrow with my tears
that I am responded by the watchful;
alas, none comprehend save a noteworthy handful -
The rest disowned these cries of despair...


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~cskadoz Apr 17, 2013   General Artist
:clap: ain't that how it is? nobody listens! nobody! . . . what?
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~shehrozeameen Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:shrug: you tell me...
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~DannyMechanist Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aala .... finally ... some of your shorter works :)
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~shehrozeameen Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
some... lol...
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The watchful respond, like ~Misanthrope0854 said, though sometimes with delay ^^;

A very interesting piece. The first line is what truly captivated me, that imagery of someone writing in vain whilst tears grace his/her face knowing that it will probably not be read, except perhaps the watchful few. It's fueled with sadness and emotions that are eager to be read, explored, touched and felt.
Alas they are not often perceived as such, and often disregarded/ignored.

:hug:
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~shehrozeameen Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
whether they speaketh in delay, they are heard -
For their messages are meant for the mocking bird.
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Did you just call yourself the mocking bird :o?

I just put tCoM in a word document, ran a preliminary spellcheck, and divided using SA/PHB.
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~shehrozeameen Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no stupid. I actually made a really good couplet:

see:

whether they speaketh in delay, they are heard -
that's obvious
For their messages are meant for the mocking bird.
their messages are taken with significant gratitude and sincere care. They are cherished, those who speak, and for that the person whom hears these words of praise brings it upon himself/herself to uphold what is the righteous thing to do - that they are heard, and responded to accordingly.

:dummy: I be awesome :D

excellent - nothing can stop me from taking over the world! And from you into enforcing an exodus of hot chicks for me to take care of *opens mouth and drolls, "hubababa"*
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._. all I know is "how to kill a mockingbird" :shrug: xD


Yes, you are :dummy:

I send you tCoM by e-mail, check it out and make changes if needed.
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~shehrozeameen Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol :) That I am :)

alright I'll look into it. :)
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