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A new dawn; the awakening from slumber;
The calling heard, hark to the titans sleeping under
The terrace of the palace of Gaea, breathing, crumbled;
Arise! Awaken to this call, thou hast commanded;
Sanctity be praised, steadfastness from a grim array
Of the power and its ode, chanting the might tune "I pray;
I pray to the destruction of the forces aligning in vain;
Feasting on a blind avarice; I pray, I pray, I pray for them this day;
Awaken the colossi sédecim (sixteen colossi), their time has come;
This, the day, of reckoning that was meant to be"
Such was the call of the warriors, awashed in altruism against Dormin
The judgement to be made out for the plenty, but the notable few vermin;
Flee, oh birds of peace! Thee are not needed this day!
Awash us with thine power, oh elders! Give... us... this... day!!!
A new dawn; the awakening from slumber;
The calling heard, hark to the titans sleeping under
My epic response to the work by ~SoldatNordsken

"To the Ancient Land"


Hope you like what you read :)
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Critique by LadyOfSilver Dec 28, 2012, 12:56:04 AM
This was beautiful. I enjoyed reading every single word.

The overall theme of the poem is honestly unique and you presented it to us with remarkable detail. This poem is evoking--it creates vivid emotions and images in one's mind.

What really impressed me was your choice of words. Original and advanced, the vocabulary you have used has built such an awe-worthy piece.

I was...captivated, if you will and if there is such word by your rhyming. Even though missing in some lines, it dominates some others, thus being fully balanced.

All in all, this piece is astounding! You really got talent there!
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ArthurCrow Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Professional Writer
This is most excellent scribing my friend. A piece that surely will inspire many a poet;
I thoroughly enjoyed every line!
Fantastic structure and word weaving.. much more attention/praise is deserving here.

Keep up the good work!
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) If you think so, then its good then. Thanks :)

Don't thank me - thank the inspiration. Couldn't have written this if I had not seen that work. :)

In any case, I'm glad you enjoyed every line. That's a compliment.
PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
Very nice, 16 titans could surely wreak havoc, let's thread the soil above their heads lightly.
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Shadow of the Colossus!!!!!!!! Find the light, ignite, and decimate!!!
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