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The Haze

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Chezzy-Am
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Literature Text

The brown leaves that fall in autumn haze
Is blissful concord; a solemn haze

I feel morose sadness fade away
Thus does it come near, a loathsome haze

The winter's snowflakes, aloft, astray
We feel their presence, a phantom haze

The songs heard, of Jibran's reverie
The autumn bid farewell by spring's haze

Soon, I heard someone whisper faintly
"Young one, come, lead us to freedom's haze"


its an attempt at a ghazal. So far as I found, it was a decent poem.

:shrug: to each their own.

I'm not going back to this format again. (which is a wrong claim because the moment someone walks over to me and says "this is awesome" I'll have someone reading it and making me change my opinion).
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PuzzledHeartBox
A decent poem indeed.
I honestly don't love the recurrence of "the haze" but I understand that this format demands it.