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I'm not exaggerating when I say... THIS is what free verse should have been.

The division was well needed. Gives that certain... blank verse feel to it... that there's nothing much going on, but definitely there's room for movement and thought.

It gives a certain air of normalcy to the work.... that's subtle... very very subtle...

In particular, parts 3 and 6 were my favorite. 7 had a certain understanding to it (which I can relate with) but 8 was a good conclusion.

I'll end this critique with "guess you should know best why you take cold showers". Well done.
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threedayweekend Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   Writer
Wow, thank you for the kind words! I appreciate the feedback and your considerations on this. :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) You're an awesome writer.

Can't wait to see what you think of my works.

P.S. Don't look at the ones I've featured, I hide the best stash in "Orbitrium", "Master Works" and "Scribbles and Notes".
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threedayweekend Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   Writer
I look forward to checking them out. But I think stash submission you need to give the link for someone to see them. But I'll look for them.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Sure thing, sir! Anytime.
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