After a very very long time, I feel proud of saying "good man yourself".
THIS was truly the most humble, the most subtle, and the most poignant embrace of such an intricate fragility of human selves that I've ever read.
YES I know bias in a critique goes against rules of dA, but there's honestly nothing over here that needs correction - the use of the meter template was very much condescending towards the picture. That's a good thing; it matches the picture very well.
There's not else to say really... I find that the poem suits the image well. Good!