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Its a good poem - it gets its point through without being too condescending. Its soft, sweet, and the ending is so much reality put together, its beyond words and beyond description.

I would definitely include the ending portions as the best parts of the poem - they have the credence to become an entity of their own. They define the "fixing you" title brilliantly - although the sweetheart had suffered and was put together, there is no way she'll ever be the same.

Which is understandable, because of what she must have gone through.

Its showing in this poem. Well done! Bravo!
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robostorm Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for the critique. I'm glad that you liked the last part. The last part was actually the first thing I wrote and then I worked back from there. So I'm glad it worked. Feel free to critique/ comment on any of my other poems.

Thanks again, and have a magical day,
Haley
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) I'll have a magical day if you'd be kind enough to look into my gallery as well.

You might find something you'd like :)

But that's your decision, I don't mean to impose - You stay happy, and stay blessed :)
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robostorm Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'd love to! I shall look at your gallery later on today!
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Whenever you can manage :)
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