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I think it is just me - because I was thinking about suicide when I read this work...

I'm not going to carry forward that idea, nor am I going to bring myself into becoming biased over such a proposition and let it influence me regarding my decision towards the end-result of this poem.

Its... scary; definitely not for younger children to be reading, or introspecting about; its far too vivid and picturesque to be taken lightly, that's for sure; The last stanza, in particular, leaves a very prominent yet subtle dent in the mind.

And that makes this poem good.
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:iconneonxaos:
neonxaos Nov 16, 2012  Student Writer
The idea what the killing of a former self, a figurative suicide, not a real one. It is meant to be a both scary but also exciting thing...
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shehrozeameen Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I suppose so... but the figurative suicide was far too explicit...

The written work was in itself a very well balanced presentation - its scary, but that's where its adrenaline rush starts to pour in.
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:iconneonxaos:
neonxaos Nov 16, 2012  Student Writer
I think you're right, this one could have used more subtlety.
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*shrug* at the end of the day, it doesn't matter.

Suicide... isn't the most courageous thing to do; I'm happy for you that you've managed to pull through, and that you've written this work to remind anyone whose reading it about the value of life itself.

And I feel happy just to know you take rehabilitation serious. Not for yourself - for anyone.

:) Say... I wrote something along the same vogue... if you're up for it, I'll watch you and you watch me... we look out for each other here on dA... if you're up for it...
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:iconneonxaos:
neonxaos Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
I don't see why not, although I have to warn you that I rarely comment on anything whatsoever :)
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:iconshehrozeameen:
shehrozeameen Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fair enough. Fav then lol.

Write something when you feel like it. :)
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