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The Piano Facade by threedayweekend

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Although this is a DD (Which is commendable in itself, and thus far greater a banner than this critique) I must emphasize that the only things which I didn't like in this work were:

the use of the word "fuck" when Art is cynically thinking. Use "damn" instead. I can understand that proof-reading is a terrible process and it takes a lot of effort to revisit old concepts, but still.

Apart from that (which played a huge impact on me as a reviewer) I feel you've written a powerful narration on the death of art as a humane emotion expressed.
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threedayweekend Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012   Writer
Thanks for the critique. I'm glad someone can give helpful tips, because that can be hard to come by.

Anyway, I'll think about what you said here for a while. I haven't thought of that particular thing being an issue but I'll have to reconsider now.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sure thing :) But in any case, well done. You've written a really good story here.
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