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The Piano Facade by threedayweekend

:iconshehrozeameen:
Although this is a DD (Which is commendable in itself, and thus far greater a banner than this critique) I must emphasize that the only things which I didn't like in this work were:

the use of the word "fuck" when Art is cynically thinking. Use "damn" instead. I can understand that proof-reading is a terrible process and it takes a lot of effort to revisit old concepts, but still.

Apart from that (which played a huge impact on me as a reviewer) I feel you've written a powerful narration on the death of art as a humane emotion expressed.
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:iconthreedayweekend:
Thanks for the critique. I'm glad someone can give helpful tips, because that can be hard to come by.

Anyway, I'll think about what you said here for a while. I haven't thought of that particular thing being an issue but I'll have to reconsider now.
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shehrozeameen Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sure thing :) But in any case, well done. You've written a really good story here.
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